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Post by Xander May 7th 2015, 6:26 pm

Alright, From the site that I once came from, we had a thread dedicated for anything about our character in which other people could come and tell the writer what they did well, and what they needed to improve on. These Critique threads were very helpful for me in my last site, and I love the idea of them. So here is one for me.

RULES:
All site rules apply.
I want this to be constructive. (So if I am not doing something right, then tell me what it is, and how I can maybe fix it.)
Wheaton's Law (If you don't know it, Look it up)

Alright, Go!

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Critque OOC or IC Evil%20Sig_zpshsta91rc
Xander
Xander

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Quote : A single man can change the world.

Warnings : 0 Warnings
Number of posts : 68
Age : 25
Job : Photoshop graphic designer,
Humor : [00:49:18] ReBreak : Yes, teleport my body parts. [00:52:09] Xander : A girl walks alone on the street. Suddenly, BAM! She has a pair of balls hit her face, and a voice coming from nowhere. "T-Bag!"
Registration date : 2015-05-07

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Post by Necket May 7th 2015, 6:39 pm

Hm. Im going to start on what you are doing well. You writing is amazing. I have not seen any grammar mistakes. Your 1st person narrative helps alot to understand how the character feels. And for what you could correct is that in the thread that we are, you said that i had a cape, which i dont have, but you should not need to worry about it. There nothing more. Do you have some advice for me as for my writing?
Necket
Necket

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Quote : "Insert Quote from Character Here" or etc.

Warnings : 0 Warnings
Number of posts : 13
Registration date : 2015-05-05

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Post by Xander May 7th 2015, 6:58 pm

Thank you. I am glad that you like my writing. And really I said capped crusader because Xander is "average" so seeing someone in a costume he would expect something like that. Not a mistake, per-say his idea of the masked "heroes" of the world.

As for what I can tell of you? lol, that would be on a different thread. Just start one up like I did, and I can respond. *This thread is kind of supposed to be all about me. Not trying to hog attention, but the thread is meant to help me about my writing, and mistakes that I have made.*

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Xander
Xander

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Quote : A single man can change the world.

Warnings : 0 Warnings
Number of posts : 68
Age : 25
Job : Photoshop graphic designer,
Humor : [00:49:18] ReBreak : Yes, teleport my body parts. [00:52:09] Xander : A girl walks alone on the street. Suddenly, BAM! She has a pair of balls hit her face, and a voice coming from nowhere. "T-Bag!"
Registration date : 2015-05-07

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Post by Necket May 7th 2015, 7:00 pm

Oh, i get the idea of the caped crusader. Good luck with everything! I hope you get a lot of nice comments.
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